教学设计
(Post-reading & Writing)
Teaching aims:
I. Know the ABC of post-reading & writing
II. Figure out the key points of the post-reading & writing. III. Finish the writing of the given text.
1.Leading in
Tell the students we are talking about the Post-reading & Writing directly. Then ask them “ are you interested in playing a game?”
以一个小游戏来导入今天的“读后续写”。
Game:
Predict what will happen next using 4 sentences
Bob was having trouble getting to sleep at night. He went to see his doctor and got some extra-strong(强效) sleeping pills. ___________________________________________________________ ___________________.
要求学生用接龙游戏（4个句子）完成小故事。（通过游戏让学生知道读后续写并不容易，从而导入今天的课程）
2. First Reading for the main idea.
Read the following passage and then answer the questions.
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Rakesh and Reena got married ten years ago. Things were quite different later. When they first got married, Rakesh cared about his wife and often made sure that she was happy. But later he was often too busy with his work and hardly paid attention to his wife, though his wife still cared about him just as she used to.
Rakesh usually boarded a train in the early morning for work. One day, when he boarded the train, he saw a man in a formal suit reading a newspaper. Beside him was a pretty lady who was knitting a sweater. It seemed that the two were together, but they did not speak a word. They traveled until their station came almost an hour later. Rakesh saw both of them get down. This went on for two to three months.
Then came winter. One day, Rakesh boarded the train. But his eyes were constantly searching for something. He saw that man standing near the door. But where was that lady who used to be there with him? A few more days went by. But the lady could no longer be seen. Rakesh could not hold back his curiousness.
He went up to the man and asked, "Excuse me, I am Rakesh. I would like to ask you something. Hope you don't mind.”The man looked at him, expressionless. Rakesh then asked about the lady.
The man looked at him and said with tears in his eyes. “ she was my wife. She passed away two weeks ago. She was battling cancer. The doctors had told her that she did not have much time left and she needed to rest. But she was determined to spend as much time with me as she could. Despite me asking her to take a rest, she used to come with me till we arrived at my office just to spend an extra hour with me daily.”
Rakesh did not know what to say. When the train stopped at the man's destination, he got off. Rakesh noticed that the man was wearing the same sweater the lady used to knit every day.
注意
1.所续写短文的词数应为150词左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1
Rakesh was deeply touched_______________________________________________
___________________________________________________________ __________
Paragraph 2:
When Rakesh returned home, Reena was laying the table.______________________
___________________________________________________________ __________
Questions:
1.What’s the type of the writing:
Narration(记叙文) or Argumentation（议论文）
2.What’s the tense of wring:
past tense（过去式） or present tense(一般现在时)
3.What are the basic elements(要素) of the story?
4.Who are the main characters? The relationship between them?
5.Where did Rakesh meet another couple?
6.When did Rakesh find the woman was not beside her husband?
7.What happened to the woman ?
8.Why did Rakesh not know what to say?
Then show
Tip1: While reading, find out the basic elements, get the main idea of the story.
3.Second Reading for the plot(情节)development and the
character’s emotion(情感) changes.
Ask the students to make a summary of each part
Part1----- Para1
Part2----- Para2
Part3----- Para3-4
Part4----- Para5
学生边回答summary，教师边在黑板上板书如下：
Plot emotion
Hardly care about his wife cold/indifferent Ask question curious
Speechless moved, regretful 通过上图理出文章情节发展和情感变化思维导图，从而推出：When you are writing, please make sure your ending is supposed to be surprising and reasonable. So we’ve got
Tip:2 While reading, figure out the plot(情节) development and the character’s emotion(情感) changes.
4. Analyze the language style.
Look at the following sentences:
1)Para1: When Rakesh and Reena first got married…… But later
he hardly …...though his wife …… just as she used
to.
2) Para2-4: Rakesh saw a lady who was knitting……But he could
not hold back his curiousness to……because……
3) Para5: Rakesh did not know what to say after…...
分析：连接词，句型结构，从而得出：
Tip3: While writing, use vivid language, transitional words , actions and dialogues to express yourself.
5.Analyze the underlined words.
Rakesh , Reena , care about, happy, used to, train, man,hold back, with tears in his eyes, was determined to 分析词性，从而得出结论：They are important signs to predict how the story will go on.
Tip4: At least five of the key words that stand for the character(s) and some important information should be used in your writing.
6 . Analyze both of the given sentences. And have a group discussion about the following questions.
Paragraph 1 : Rakesh was deeply touched. __________________ Q1:How did he feel?
Q2:What would he do next?
Paragraph 2: When Rakesh returned home, Reena was laying the table.
_________________________________________________________
Q1:If you were Rakesh, what would you do or say?
Q2:If you were Reena, what would you do or say?
Have a group discussion , find a group leader to write it down and a speaker to give a presentation.
Tip5: According to the given beginning of each para, predict the ending reasonably and logically.
7. Presentation (give proper comment on the presentations)
8. come to the conclusion: steps to complete a story
1.Reading
2. 6 basic questions (who? When? Where? What? Why? How?)
3. Summarizing the main idea
4. Inferring the ending reasonably and logically
5.writing(language: vivid, transitional words, various
structures)
6. Polishing(润色语言)
7.Handwriting (neat and clear)
9.Assignment
1.Finish your post-reading & writing
2.Polish your draft and rewrite it
Please write down your post-reading & writing___________________
___________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________. Self-evaluation table自我评价表
学情分析
李琳
高二学生已掌握一定的词汇量，也有一定的生活体验，有自己独立的思想，乐于合作和探究，普遍对新鲜事物感兴趣，对英语也比较感兴趣。他们具备一定阅读能力，能用不同的阅读技巧阅读分析文章。学生经过前期的学习和积累，已经能够较好地使用语句间的连接成分，写出一篇结构比较紧凑，并且符合逻辑的英语文章。因此我在教学设计上由浅入深，层层递进，设计不同的教学活动让大部分学生参与进来，享受小组合作的快乐，从而达到乐学高效的效果。
高二学生普遍的写作困难主要来自语言表达，表现在词汇、语法和汉语思维模式等方面。我班学生具备相应的词汇量，有比较扎实的语法基础，需要改进的问题在于一些同学写作时，只把若干句子机械地堆砌，结果写出的段落或篇章条理不清晰，逻辑不严密，语义不连贯。因此在该堂课中，我着重分析了原故事的语言风格，用词特点，情节发展脉络，帮助学生更好地运用已经掌握的英语语言知识，
理解本篇文章需要的写作技能，完成读后续写。
效果分析
李琳
本节课是读后续写课，侧重从阅读中来，到写作中去，注重知识的迁移，经过引导和帮助，能够达到课标的基本理念：优化学习方式，提高自主学习能力。同时读后续写包括学生的自主阅读和理解，又有写作过程中小组合作，能够“发展自主学习和合作学习的能力”；本节课较好地实现了这些理念和目标。
下面结合具体教学环节，介绍一下教学效果。
Ⅰ.阅读
1.导入环节
以一个小游戏来导入今天的“读后续写”。
Game:
Predict what will happen next using 4 sentences
Bob was having trouble getting to sleep at night. He went to see his doctor and got some extra-strong(强效) sleeping pills. ___________________________________________________________ ___________________.
要求学生用接龙游戏（4个句子）完成小故事。（通过游戏让学生知道读后续写并不容易，从而导入今天的课程）
导入环节用时少、内容有趣，学生兴趣得到很好地激发，创设合适语境导入本节课，为“写作”服务。用时2分钟。
2.阅读和知识运用环节
两个阅读的环节，阅读目的各有侧重。学生参与度高，能运用阅读技巧进行阅读。并且能够进行小组合作，独立完成练习。在此过程中，带领学生找出原文故事六要素，总结各段大意，分析语言特点，划线词语，以及给出的两个段落首句，为下一环节的写作提供坚实的基础。学生的语言技能和语言知识得到训练和扩展，阅读策略得到渗透，学生获取信息、处理信息的能力得以在日常不断得到锻炼和提高。共用时15分钟。
3. 读后思考环节
本环节是读后的思考，通过回顾所学读后续写的五个建议，引导学生思考预计故事的发展方向，人物的情感发展脉络，学生能够积极思考，各抒己见，为下一步写作提供条件。
上面这些环节处理完文章的阅读，又渗透着写作的准备，由浅入深，紧扣主题，形式多样，激发兴趣和思维，简洁而高效。下面就要进入写作环节。用时3分钟。
Ⅱ.写作
本环节学生进行小组合作，讨论问题，预计故事的发展方向，
人物的情感发展脉络。学生热情很高，小组活动顺畅，培养了学生“分析问题和解决问题”的能力。用时15分钟，
III. 展示
请学生上台展示当堂写出的文章，教师做出总结性,鼓励性的评价，从而带领学生进一步回顾本堂课内容，并且增强锻炼学生当众演讲的能力，提高其自信心。用时10分钟。
总体看，本节课教学环节清晰，达到预期效果。
教材分析
李琳
以下为这节课（读后续写）中所用的文章
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Rakesh and Reena got married ten years ago. Things were quite different later. When they first got married, Rakesh cared about his wife and often made sure that she was happy. But later he was often too busy with his work and hardly paid attention to his wife, though his wife still cared about him just as she used to.
Rakesh usually boarded a train in the early morning for work. One day, when he boarded the train, he saw a man in a formal suit reading a newspaper. Beside him was a pretty lady who was knitting a sweater. It seemed that the two were together, but they did not speak a word. They traveled until their station came almost an hour later. Rakesh saw both of them get down. This went on for two to three months.
Then came winter. One day, Rakesh boarded the train. But his eyes were constantly searching for something. He saw that man standing near the door. But where was that lady who used to be there with him? A few more days went by. But the lady could no longer be seen. Rakesh could not hold back his curiousness. He went up to the man and asked, "Excuse me, I am Rakesh. I would like to ask you something. Hope you don't mind.”The man looked at him, expressionless. Rakesh then asked about the lady.
The man looked at him and said with tears in his eyes. “ she was my wife. She passed away two weeks ago. She was battling cancer. The doctors had told her that she did not have much time left and she needed to rest. But she was determined to spend as much time with me as she could. Despite me asking her to take a rest, she used to come with me till we arrived at my office just to spend an extra hour with me daily.”
Rakesh did not know what to say. When the train stopped at the man's destination, he got off. Rakesh noticed that the man was wearing the same sweater the lady used to knit every day.
注意
1.所续写短文的词数应为150词左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1
Rakesh was deeply touched_______________________________________________ Paragraph 2:
When Rakesh returned home, Reena was laying the table._____________________________________________________ ______________________________________
读后续写是高考综合改革试验省份高考英语试卷写作题中第二
节中的一个题型。
读后续写具体题型是提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写（150词
左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。阅卷时将主要考虑以下内容：
1.与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；
2.内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况；
3.应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；
4.上下文的连贯性。
读后续写，包含了“写作”、“阅读”、“分析”、“创造”
等环节。其中，最难的是合理的创造，即逻辑。那么，如何才能在故事续写中做到合理审题、合理创造呢？我主要从结构阅读，情节阅读两个层面进行了分析。
一．既然是英语阅读，那么对于读后续写的篇章也应该坚持阅读的最重要一步：篇章结构分析。该篇文章属于故事类记叙文。所有故事都离不开六要素：“who , when , where, what ,why ,how”这
就是故事的真正结构，因此在指导学生阅读时，不应该只走马观花看情节，而应找出文章的六要素，然后将每个主要事件用六要素串联成一句话。这样一来，冗长的故事就成了两三句，文章的结构自然水落石出。
二．情节是故事的生命力。为了写出符合故事发展的结尾，就必须先分析原文的情节发展方向。除了采用上文提到过的六要素分析法，还应该着重三点：起因，转折，高潮。只有帮助学生确定了故事的起因，才能合理推断这个起因会导致的可能结果；只有确定了故事的转
折，才能合理地将故事发展下去。但在设计情节时，同样要考虑六要素，将它们串联成一句话，再将这句话添砖加瓦变成段落。
因此我在这节读后续写课上，通过引导学生如何从阅读中获取有效信息，迁移运用到写作中，帮助学生完成该篇读后续写的任务。意在“提高学生用英语获取信息、处理信息、分析问题和解决问题的能力”，使得学生能够“形成有效的英语学习策略；培养学生的综合语言运用能力”。
评侧练习
李琳
1.Playing a game.（have a group discussion）
Predict what will happen next using 4 sentences.
Bob was having trouble getting to sleep at night. He went to see his doctor and got some extra-strong(强效)sleeping pills.
___________________________________________________________ ___________________.
2.First Reading for the main idea. Answer the following sentences.
1.What’s the type of the writing:Narration(记叙文) or Argumentation
2.What’s the tense of wring:past tense（过去式）or present tense(现在时)
3.What are the basic elements(要素) of the story?
4.Who are the main characters? The relationship between them?
5.Where did Rakesh meet another couple?
6.When did Rakesh find the woman was not beside her husband?
7.What happened to the woman ?
8.Why did Rakesh not know what to say?
3. Second Reading for the plot(情节)development and the character’s emotion(情感) changes. Make a summary of each part
Part1-----Para1
Part2-----Para2
Part3-----Para3-4
Part4-----Para5
4. Analyze the language style.
1.Para1: When Rakesh and Reena first got married…… But later
he hardly …...though his wife …… just as she used to.
2.Para2-4: Rakesh saw a lady who was knitting……But he could
not hold back his curiousness to ……because ……
3.Para5: Rakesh did not know what to say after…...
5. Analyze the underlined words.
Rakesh , Reena , care about, happy, used to, train, man, hold back, with tears in his eyes, was determined to
6. Analyze both of the given sentences. Answer the following questions.
Paragraph 1 : Rakesh was deeply touched. __________________
Q1:How did he feel?
Q2:What would he do next?
Paragraph 2: When Rakesh returned home, Reena was laying the table.
_________________________________________________________
Q1:If you were Rakesh, what would you do or say?
Q2:If you were Reena, what would you do or say?
7. Please write down your post-reading & writing___________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________.
8. Presentation
课后反思
李琳
这是一节读后续写课。读后续写是高考综合改革试验省份高考英语试卷写作题中第二节中的一个类型。作为高考新题型，受到广泛关注。
阅读和写作能力是高中英语学习中最基本的技能，阅读是写作的前提和基础，而写作是阅读的延伸和巩固。在这节读后续写课上，老师通过引导学生如何从阅读中获取有效信息，迁移运用到写作中，意在“提高学生用英语获取信息、处理信息、分析问题和解决问题的能力”，使得学生能够“形成有效的英语学习策略；培养学生的综合语言运用能力”。
笔者意识到阅读与写作的密切关系，并深感在今后的高考中读后续写的重要性。并积极探索读后续写的课例研究，把课标的要求贯彻到日常教学中，取得了良好的教学效果。
我探究的主题是：探索读和写如何有机结合，如何用阅读促进学生写作能力的提升。目前，英语教学中往往存在这种现实困境。即：写作教学与课本的教授脱节；学生写作能力提高缓慢，老师觉得不好教，学生觉得太难学。
这节探究课对于这个现实问题做出了一些有益探索。我结合教学环节的改进，说一说自己对于本节课课例研究的一点思考。
1.导入环节：改进稿中导入环节设计成一个小游戏，用时少、而且
有趣，激发了学生的兴趣，为阅读和写作服务。
2. 阅读环节：读写结合，要求设计者给阅读定好位，阅读的目的是为写作服务，这就是和阅读课的区别。所以要对阅读环节进行重组。两个阅读的环节，阅读目的各有侧重。学生参与度高，能运用阅读技巧进行阅读。并且能够进行小组合作，独立完成练习。在此过程中，带领学生找出原文故事六要素，总结各段大意，分析语言特点，划线词语，以及给出的两个段落首句，为下一环节的写作提供坚实的基础。学生的语言技能和语言知识得到训练和扩展，阅读策略得到渗透，学生获取信息、处理信息的能力得到锻炼和提高。
3.写作环节：学生多次接触文本，加深了学习效果；学生主动寻找表达方式，在后面的写作中学生积极运用所找到的表达；层层追问，学生积极思考、头脑活跃。通过前期积极地参与阅读分析，充分的小组讨论，高质量地完成了读后续写。
所以，第一次讲课中以老师教授为主，学生被动接受，改进后利于学生主体作用的发挥。第一次讲课阅读到此结束，改进后深入挖掘了文本。第一次讲课的内容看似丰富有趣，实则喧宾夺主，改进后环节简洁流畅、重点突出，实用高效。
4.写后环节：请学生上台展示当堂写出的文章，教师做出总结性,鼓励性的评价，从而带领学生进一步回顾本堂课内容，并且增强锻炼学生当众演讲的能力，提高其自信心。
总的来说：这是一堂令我满意的课，达到了预期效果。
课标分析
续写亮点突破系列 一、主句，+ 简短状语（介词短语，分词，状语从句的省略，形容词，副词） 1.At last he came, with his hands in his pockets 2.He was stunned there, staring at me with wide eyes. 3.With apparently unwilling affection, he nodded. 4.With a mixture of surprise and confusion, he managed a forced smile. 5.When coming back, he still folded his arms with a little anger on his face. 6.With an impatient look, he listened to me reluctantly. 7.He was numb with shock, staring at me. 8.Then the next second his eyes were shining like diamonds, with a bright smile on his face. 9.Curious, he approached to find a silver balloon. 10.With tears in her eyes, he decided to help Desiree. 11.Touched deeply, he decided to tell a white lie. 12.With heart beating wildly, she hurried to show it … 13.Holding back my tears, I tried to squeeze a smile. 14.Bathed in a festival atmosphere, he was in high spirits. 15.He attempted to find the owner, but all in vain. 16.Her eyes began to water, with her stomach uncomfortably twisting. 17.Looking at each other, we smiled, hiding ourselves in the car and expecting his reaction to the gift. 18.Obviously confused at the sudden disorder around, Rafael turned to me for reasons in written words. 19. Surprisingly, my explanation put a smile on his face. 20.Greeting us with a confident smile, Rafael shared his story in a magnetic voice, which left me surprised. 21.Feeling a lump in the throat, I clapped my hands even more loudly, determined never to judge a book by its cover. 22.He gave me a bright smile, with his eyes sparkling. 23.To our delight and relief, Tom recovered quickly. 二、形容词、副词的恰当使用 1.Cherish every single moment when you can stay with her. 2.I turned to him and said gently. 3.He looked at me with a broad smile. 4.I praised him sincerely. 5.Taking it home, Wade read the touching lines 6. A thunderous applause burst out. 7.I’m firmly convinced that … 8.with a burning desire to win, he … 9.So excited was he that he held it tightly, rushing into the house. 10. 11. 12.
【专项练习】高中英语读后续写专项练习 -CAL-FENGHAI.-(YICAI)-Company One1
高中英语读后续写专项练习 1.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 I still remember it，like it was yesterday when my parents told me the news. It was the week before Christmas on Thursday morning when my parents said, “Stacy, start packing your things so we can go to Florida for the holidays.” “Okay, ”I responded.We do this every year for Christmas and New Year. It’s kind of a family tradition we have.We go every year because we like to visit some family members living in Florida.There has never been a year when we’ve missed a trip to Florida for the holidays. I was so excited to go on this trip because Christmas is my favorite holiday, but to top it off I was going to get to celebrate it with my family. The next morning，my mother entered my room.“Stacy, wake up！We need to go to the airport so that we can get our plane tickets to Florida before they sell out.” I jumped out of bed and got ready as fast as I could.When we were on our way to the airport，I couldn’t stop talking and smiling because I was too excited about getting our tickets. “Aren’t you just excited to go to Florida” I asked. “Yes, I am.We can finally catch up with the family and drink hot cocoa，”responded my moth er. The airport was so crowded. Some people were leaving to other countries and others were just visiting for the holiday. There was such a huge line in the airport because so many different people were buying plane tickets.
专题10 读后续写高分技巧综合训练 一、请运用所学技巧翻译下面的段落。 （一） Jim 看到袭击者逃进了黑暗中，他想到了那个姑娘。Jim 仍然喘着粗气，朝着她走去。那姑娘坐在灌木丛后面哭着。尽管Jim在黑暗中几乎看不清那姑娘，他还是能确定地感觉到她惊魂未定。Jim不想再吓着她，他隔开一定距离和她说话。Jim轻轻地告诉她袭击者已经逃跑了，她安全了。姑娘许久没说话，接着他吃惊地听到姑娘问道：“是你吗，爸爸？” 【参考范文】 Seeing the attacker flee/disappear/run into the darkness, Jim thought of the girl. Still breathing heavily, Jim walked towards her. The girl was sitting behind the bushes, sobbing. Although in the darkness Jim could hardly see the girl clearly, he could sense her trembling alarm with certainty. To avoid frightening the girl further, Jim spoke to her at a distance. In a soft voice, Jim told her that the attacker had run away and that she was safe. There was a long silence and then in astonishment he heard the girl ask, “Dad, is that you?” 【点评】这篇短文用到了前面学过的Ving、副词和介词短语，丰富了表达形式，使情感描写和动作描写更加细腻生动。 （二） 第二天，Meg去跟Mrs.Gilson 解释了她为什么不交回家作业。为了不让同学知道这件事，她趁没人注意时悄悄地溜进了Mrs. Gilson的办公室。Meg低着头，她告诉了Mrs.Gilson她的回家作业找不到了。“我保证我完成了回家作业。。。。。。”她解释道，眼里含着泪。见此情景，Mrs. Gilson 打断了她。她笑着告诉Meg 她已经在上一天把她的作业和试卷一起交起来了。她知道Meg不会因为偷懒而说谎。听到Mrs.Gilson的话，Meg 如释重负。她开心地笑了，眼里的泪水落了下来。 【参考范文】 The next day, Meg went to tell Mrs. Gilson why she couldn’t hand in her homework. To avoid being known by her classmates, she secretly slid into Mrs. Gilson’s office without being noticed. Her head drooped, Meg told Mrs. Gilson the truth that she just could not find her homework. “I promise that I did finish my homework and…” she explained, tears welling up in her eyes/ eyes brimming with tears. Seeing this, Mrs. Gilson interrupted her. With a smile, she told Meg that she had handed in her homework with her paper the day before. She knew Meg was not lying because of laziness. Hearing this, Meg felt a surge of relief. She smiled brightly, drops of tears rolling down her cheeks. 【点评】这篇短文用到了前面学过的Ving、副词、介词短语、情绪表达和独立结构，尤其是独立结构。文
高中英语新高考-英语作文：读后续写题型的写作兵法三招：转折,语言,词库 目前英语卷的题型的改革力度是够大的，说来就来。这不，各种证据证明，未来作文会变成文章续写，即：给一篇350词左右的记叙文给你，结尾没有，让考生自由发挥。限制是:需要用上文章里给定的五个左右的词语。目前浙江已经明确在考试说明中说了，后面的高考就要采用这种形式。（孙三五） 这种改革给考生一种恐慌，为什么呢？因为从未写过这样的文章，而且续写听起来好高大上。但是，我看来，这种作文最好发挥。我给出的技巧是：内容上要注意两个转折；语言上要注意倒装和非谓语动词；另外，我给考生们准备了万能的九个小词库。 一、何为内容上的两个转折 写记叙文，英汉是同理的。故事要有曲折即：twist。而高考作文150作文只能让你写顶多两个曲折。曲折分：情节曲折和心理变化的曲折。 英语作文毕竟和语文作文有差别，我们的曲折不要一味追求离奇，而是讲究逻辑的连贯。 二、语言的运用 记叙文是动作和语言的干活，不需要你写复杂句，这是文体的需要。常用的是：非谓语动词和倒装句。为什么呢？因为只有这两种语法结构句子才能表达动作的多样性。 三、关于九个小词库 我认为记叙文的心情描写是伴随着动作一起的，你有什么样的心情就有什么样的动作。笔者平时有摘抄各种文学作品的佳句和词块的习惯。仅挑选一小部分，省略了伴随心情的手、脚、脸等词库，进行粗线条的概括。虽然不多，但我认为也足够应付高考了。我将它们分为九大类： 一、如何表达决心和注意力的集中： 二、如何表达同情和关心 三、如何表达轻松 四、如何表达生气、不耐烦等不愉快的心情 五、如何表达胆小、害怕 六、如何表达害怕、害羞和尴尬 七、如何表达悲伤
读后续写好句积累 He had time to reflect on his successes and failures. 他有时间反思他的成功和失败。(reflect on...反思；仔细思考...) Environmentalists are alarmed by the increase in pollution. 不断加重的污染引起环保人士的担忧。(be alarmed at/by...对...感到担忧；惊慌) He was alarmed to discover that his car was gone. 他惊慌地发现自己的车不见了。（be alarmed to see /hear...惊慌地看到;听到...） Tim was a clumsy boy, always bumping into the furniture. 蒂姆是个笨手笨脚的孩子，老是撞到家具上。(bump into sb/sth撞到...) I dragged myself out of bed and into the bathroom. 我吃力地下床走进浴室。 (drag yourself to /into /out of...费力地走到/进/出某处) He paused for breath, then continued up the hill. 他停下来歇口气，然后继续上山。
"No," he replied, without pausing for thought. "不是的。" 他不假思索地答道。 Charles was overcome with grief. 查尔斯悲痛欲绝。 His eyes fell on her bag. "Are you going somewhere?" 他的目光落在她的包上。"你是不是要去什么地方？"(sb's eyes / gaze / glance fall(s) on sth 某人的目光落在某物上) Only one man tried to help us, the rest just looked on in silence.只有一个人尽力帮助我们，其余的人都只是一声不吭地袖手旁观。 He sprang to his feet and rushed after her. 他腾地站起身，冲过去追她。(spring to one's feet一跃而起) Tears rolled down her cheeks. 泪珠顺着她的脸颊滚落。 Thunder rolled in the distance. 远处雷声隆隆。
读后续写好句积累（1） 1. She tried to hide her anger. 她试图掩饰自己的愤怒。 (hide your disappointment/anger...掩饰...) 2. She laughed to hide her nervousness. 她笑了笑以掩饰自己的紧张。 3. The treatment offers a ray of hope for cancer sufferers 这种治疗方法给癌症患者一线希望。 (a ray of hope/light 一线希望/光明) 4. Rays of light filtered through the trees. 一束束光线透过树丛照射下来。(透过?f?lt?) 5. His statement was greeted with cries of astonishment and anger. 他的这番话被报以一片叫喊声，有震惊，也有愤怒。（be greeted with /by sth被报以...) 6. Complete silence greeted us as we entered the room. 走进房间，迎接我们的是一片沉默。 7. I felt a rush of excitement when she arrived. 她来到的时候，我感到一阵激动。(a rush of anger / excitement / gratitude...一阵...) 8. A rush of jealousy swept through(over) her.
她心中突然涌起一阵嫉妒。(妒忌?d?el?si) 9. The smoke hung in the air. 烟在空中缭绕。(mist/smoke/smell hangs in the air在空中缭绕) 10. A thick mist hung over the town. 小镇笼罩在浓浓的雾霭中。 读后续写好句积累（2） 11. Joe's been ill for weeks now - it's really dragging him down. 乔已经病了几个星期了，这使他很沮丧。(drag sb down 使人感到不愉快) 12. Forester stared at his car, trembling with rage. 福里斯特盯着他的汽车，气得浑身发抖。(trembling / shaking with rage 气得浑身发抖) 13. Sobbing with rage, Carol was taken to the hospital. 卡罗尔气得呜呜哭，被送往医院。 14. His face was red with rage. 他气得满脸通红。 15. The child was quivering(trembling) in her arms. 那孩子在她怀里发抖。 (抖动?kw?v?) 16. Her mouth quivered slightly as she turned away. 她嘴唇微微哆嗦着，转过头去。 17. I lay there quivering with fear.
新题型写作 读后续写 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walked along Park Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldn’t get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like you’ve got a problem,”Arthur said. “I’m afraid so. I’m in a big hurry and I can’t start my car.” “Is there something I can do to help?”Arthur asked. The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If you’re sure it wouldn’t be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.” “No trouble at all. I’d be glad to help.” The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the loud noise of an alarm. It was from the bank. There had been a robbery! Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened?”But everyone had a different answer. Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the bank and walked right into the young woman in front of him. She looked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised. “Why is she looking at me like that?”He thought.“The suitcase! She thinks I’m the bank thief!” Arthur looked around at the crowd of people. He became frightened, and without another thought, he started to run. 注意： 1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1 ：
一 阅读下面的材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之成为一篇完整的短文。续写的字数应为150字左右。 It was the lovely month of February, when everyone was sick of the snow, and spring still felt light years away. The cold air on windows during February, however, always did make for good pictures in the stream of my breath. Every year, we invite the children to our club to make cookies or chocolate at holiday times. The children are always excited to come back and have memorized the rules by now. We explain how to spoon the different-colored chocolates into the heart-shaped molds, and the kids jump right into the project, even the youngest ones, who are too short to reach the counter. On this day, there was a boy I was drawn to. He was ten, but his attitude told the story of a boy who had been hardened (使刚毅) by the world and all the trouble that he suffered from. His face looked much older than his age. I especially noticed the lollipop(棒棒糖)he was making. Most of the children had finished with their projects. There wasn’t m uch chocolate left. He took the remaining spoonfuls of all the different colors, which were so jumbled(混乱的)that a person could not see where one color started and the next ended. It seemed to him that all that mattered was that he was able to finish his chocolate. Two hours had passed and it was time for everyone to go. Each of the children was given a bag, and they all split the candy amongst themselves to take with them. The ten-year-old boy came back over to me after he had gotten his share of candy. He noticed my hands were empty. Why didn't you take any? "he asked “I wanted to make sure there was enough for everyone else, ”I said “Oh,” he replied, but I could see he didn’t really accept my answer. As everyone got ready to leave, I was occupied with my work and didn’t see the boy staring at me. I got a hug from each of the smiling children as they slipped out of the door. My ten-year-old friend was the last to go. By now, I had noticed the little tough guy looking at me. He came up to me again, this time slowly, looking around to make sure no one was watching. Paragraph 1 This is for you, " he said, as he handed me a piece of candy. _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________ Paragraph 2 I have been keeping that lollipop ever since _______________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________
专题09 高分情绪描写技巧 一、情绪描写之笑 smile brightly; grin at sb; laugh; beam; light (sth) up; light up with; burst into laughter; burst out laughing；wear a bright/broad smile; give sb a smile 学一学： beam: smile very happily 例：获胜者满意地笑了。 译法一：The winner beamed/smiled with satisfaction. 译法二：The winner wore a satisfied smile on his face. light up: if someone’s face or eyes light up, they show pleasure, excitement etc light up with：His eyes lit up with laughter. Her face lit up with pleasure. light sth up: to make someone’s face or eyes show pleasure or excitement Suddenly a bright smile lit up her face/eyes. 练一练： 看到直升飞机，Jane 高兴地笑了起来。 判断正误：Seeing the helicopter, a bright smile lit up her face. 二、情绪描写之高兴激动 V.dance; whistle; jump/leap with joy; feel a surge of happiness/delight/joy/excitement; be overcome with happines/delight/joy/excitement;(one’s eyes) twinkle；(one’s heart) beat/pound wildly Adj.happy; delighted; overjoyed; excited; thrilled; wild with joy 练一练： 当她知道考试结果时，她兴奋极了。 三、情绪描写之生气 feel/get angry/furious; feel a surge of anger(rage/fury); eyes blaze; storm out of/into/off ; storm(say angrily); sth. makes sb’s blood boil(sth makes sb extremely angry); clasp one’s hands; clench one’s fists/teeth; speechless 练一练： Sam 感到非常生气。 四、情绪描写之伤心痛苦
读后续写好句积累 1. She tried to hide her anger. 她试图掩饰自己的愤怒。 (hide your disappointment/anger...掩饰...) 2. She laughed to hide her nervousness. 她笑了笑以掩饰自己的紧张。 3. The treatment offers a ray of hope for cancer sufferers 这种治疗方法给癌症患者一线希望。 (a ray of hope/light 一线希望/光明) 4. Rays of light filtered through the trees. 一束束光线透过树丛照射下来。(透过?f?lt?) 5. His statement was greeted with cries of astonishment and anger. 他的这番话被报以一片叫喊声，有震惊，也有愤怒。（be greeted with /by sth被报以...) 6. Complete silence greeted us as we entered the room. 走进房间，迎接我们的是一片沉默。 7. I felt a rush of excitement when she arrived. 她来到的时候，我感到一阵激动。(a rush of anger / excitement / gratitude...一阵...)
8. A rush of jealousy swept through(over) her. 她心中突然涌起一阵嫉妒。(妒忌?d?el?si) 9. The smoke hung in the air. 烟在空中缭绕。(mist/smoke/smell hangs in the air在空中缭绕) 10. A thick mist hung over the town. 小镇笼罩在浓浓的雾霭中。 11. Joe's been ill for weeks now - it's really dragging him down. 乔已经病了几个星期了，这使他很沮丧。(drag sb down 使人感到不愉快) 12. Forester stared at his car, trembling with rage. 福里斯特盯着他的汽车，气得浑身发抖。(trembling / shaking with rage 气得浑身发抖) 13. Sobbing with rage, Carol was taken to the hospital. 卡罗尔气得呜呜哭，被送往医院。 14. His face was red with rage. 他气得满脸通红。 15. The child was quivering(trembling) in her arms. 那孩子在她怀里发抖。 (抖动?kw?v?) 16. Her mouth quivered slightly as she turned away. 她嘴唇微微哆嗦着，转过头去。 17. I lay there quivering with fear. 我躺在那儿，害怕得直发抖。
2020高中英语新高考 读后续写细节描写第一讲：描写forest, woods 英语文学的描写在于细节，如此可以细分为物和人两大类别。就物而言，又分山川和建筑。 山川又可以细分为：forest, mountains, caves, islands and volcanoes, paths, rivers, sea。第一个章节我说forest，这也是鉴于浙江这几年的读后续写都是关于森林有关的多。 但高中的词汇量也就是3500，而文学中的景色描写很容易超过这个数字。我为了减轻高中生的记忆压力，力图从200多本经典英文原著中挑选最常见的表达（我发现很多表达反复出现在很多人作品中，因此以下呈现都可以供高中学生大胆选用），个别超纲词汇也无碍。 如何练习： 当写到树林的时候，查看本节，根据文章需要挑选句子。 我的学生跟我说，记不住。其实，没有谁能一下子记住，多练习几篇就会记住的。 考生需要记住，景色描写，一定要脑子里存在几幅图，例如下面的，这样你才能更好去应用。实际上，读后续写的图像定格是非常重要和实用的技能，我后面会说到。 Chapter 1 Forest 这一节说树林，无非围绕：草、花、树（包括树干、树茎、树叶、藤蔓）、颜色。其中读者最好多记忆一些文学作品中常见的花名，好比汉语小说中常用牵牛花、红豆等。（虽然有点累，但是你会发现很值得） 以高考真题作文为例：妻子和丈夫分手后迷路了，两段的开头：
高频短语–名词和形容词 * Magnificent forest of tall trees高大的森林 * Like a crowd of vivid green umbrellas像一群鲜艳的绿色雨伞* Emerald /?em(?)r?ld/ green leaves翠绿的叶子 * Vivid green stems鲜艳的绿色茎 * Like fluttering, emerald ribbons像飘动的翡翠丝带 * Blazing carpet of bluebells耀眼的风信子 * Red and orange berries红色和橙色浆果
四 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续 写的词数应为150左右。 Mom was a good cook. No, I take that back. She was a great cook. She could take a little hamburger a few potatoes and some tomatoes to make a feast that would make everyone drool(流口水) .And the dishes she could do with chicken well, it makes my mouth water to think about her delicious fried chicken. Her homemade chili sauce was second to none. Her bottled peaches were better than candies. When I was a little girl I once offered to make my sister Kathy’s bed for a week if she would give me the last slice of toast made with Moms homemade bread and pineapple jam. Kathy w ouldn’t go for it. She prefe rred to eat the toast. There is no doubt that Mom was a great cook most of the time. But if you put a steak in her pan, she would turn it into a texture(口感) of shoe leather. Of course, she didn’t do that on purpose She really did try her best. The night before I was married, she thought she was giving me a special treat by preparing a thick steak. It tasted as terrible as usual. Several months later, my elder brother Bud took me out for lunch and ordered steaks. I wasn’t excited, but since he was paying I figured I could try a few bites. When the waitress served our steaks, I was surprised at how good they smelled .Mom's steaks never smelled like that. Suddenly, I understood why others spoke of steak fondly. I finished my steak greedily, and even stole a bite of Bud’s."“ You k now," I said to Bud, patting my stomach with real satisfaction, "I used to think Mom was a great cook. But it's hard to believe her steaks come from the same animal as these steaks. Of course she is, Bud said. "But think about it. She grew up during a time when her family was very poor. That’s when she learned to cook. How often do you think they had steak? Probably not very often, I guessed Paragraph 1 “Probably never,”Bud said . _____________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: But then it occurred to me that "great” do esn' t mean" perfect” _____________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 1: “ Probably never," Bud said.“ And when I was a little boy and Dad was in the army, don't remember ever having steak. It's only after our youngest sister was born that Mom and Dad could afford steak. So it isn’t that Mom isn't a good cook. It's just that she didn’t have a lot of experience of cooking steak. That’s the reason for my mother’s having a weakness in the kitchen. It was difficult for me to understand this at first, especially after we enjoyed Moms incredible fried chicken the day before. Paragraph 2 But then it occurred to me that“ great” doesn' t mean" perfe ct”. It just means" great” It's great of Mom to have cooked delicious food for us for years and make everyone feel happy. But what did I do for her? I determined to give Mom a surprise. After learning from a friend, I prepared a big dinner for Mom .When she saw the nice steak and had her first bite of it, a happy smile appeared on her face. 1