英语作文五个贴士：减少不必要的啰嗦
1、减少长的从句：多用短语代替从句
原句Wordy: The clown who was in the center ring was riding a tricycle. 改写Revised: The clown in the center ring was riding a tricycle.
2、减少短语：能用单词别用短语 Reduce Phrases
Wordy: The clown at the end of the line tried to sweep up the spotlight. Revised: The last clown tried to sweep up the spotlight.
3、避免空洞开头 Avoid Empty Openers: There be
Wordy:There is a prize in every box of Quacko cereal.
Revised: A prize is in every box of Quacko cereal.
Wordy:There are two security guards at the gate.
Revised: Two security guards stand at the gate.
4、不要过渡使用修饰词 Don't Overwork Modifiers
Do not overwork very, really, totally, and other modifiers that add little or nothing to the meaning of a sentence.
Wordy: By the time she got home, Merdine was very tired.
Revised: By the time she got home, Merdine was exhausted
Wordy: She was also really hungry.
Revised: She was also hungry [or famished].
5、多用抽象名词enjoyment; happiness; 多用具体词汇；多用实义动词；多用主动语态；长短句交错使用；句式多样化避免单一；