雅思教父刘洪波：犯罪类雅思作文高分范文及点评
雅思教父刘洪波2010权威作品
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Putting criminals into prisons is not an effective way to deal with them. Instead, education and job training should be offered. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
How to handle criminals is a problem that all countries and societies face. Traditionally, the approach has been to punish them by placing them in prisons to pay for what they have done. Some, however, advocate for trying to make them better with training and education and it seems they may have a good point.
First of all, consider all the money that we have to spend to lock people up in jail. It doesn’t seem like a good use of public money if the people don’t actually get any better. Because most criminals eventually are let out of prison, our focus should be on making them better citizens.
In fact, the reason why many people end up in jail in the first place is because they didn’t have a good education or happy family. So if they can learn job skills they perhaps can find work and feel they can contribute in a positive way. If they do this, they won’t need crime. Surly everyone deserves a second chance.
Of course this does not mean that we should be too lenient on criminals. Those who commit crime should still be punished, but during their punishment they should also be treated. If we make an investment in them and show compassion, most will be able to make a new start.
To summarize, we must make more of an effort to go to the root of the problem. We need to treat criminals as patients and give them the medicine they need: education and training. By giving people the skills for a second chance we can make our society safer and healthier.
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Harvey点评：
写作线索：首段，赞同题目观点；第二段，罪犯在监狱里什么都不做是花着纳税人的钱的；第三段，没有接受教育和不幸的家庭是原因，要教育，要给他们机会；第四段；当然要惩罚，但惩罚和治疗并用。末段总结。
好文章。末段第二句的比喻给本文增色不少，：We need to treat criminals as patients and give them the medicine they need: education and training.十分贴切。
先学习下面的词汇和短语，然后再重读范文，体会它们在文中的运用
词汇
Punish vt.惩罚，处罚
Advocate vt.提倡
jail n.监狱=prison
lenient adj.宽大的，仁慈的
compassion n.同情
patient n.病人
短语
in jail监禁
end up最后结果
commit crime犯罪
make an investment in…投资于
make an effort to do 努力去做
三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子
●In fact, the reason why many people end up in jail in the first place is because
they didn’t have a good education or happy family.
●We need to treat criminals as patients and give them the medicine they need:
education and training.
●By giving people the skills for a second chance we can make our society safer
and healthier.
——摘自刘洪波2010新作《最简化雅思写作》
犯罪与法律类雅思写作话题解析 本文为大家解析的是犯罪与法律类雅思写作话题，希望大家通过对母题和衍生子题的分析，更好把握雅思写作话题的出题和答题思路，从而对大家的涂鸦之路有所帮助。 1. 青少年犯罪 母题：In many parts of the world children and teenagers are committing morecrimes. Why is this case happening? How should children or teenagers bepunished? (100804) 提示：青少年犯罪juvenile delinquency 产生的原因及其解决方法。可从家庭、社会、媒体三个角度分析。 子题：很多年轻人有一种反社会行为，原因是什么，如何解决?犯罪是人类本性，还是可以预防的? 2. 犯罪预防 母题：Unlike in most other countries, police in the UK do not commonly carryguns. Some people think it leaves citizens unprotected. But others think itreduces the overall violence in our society. Discuss both sides of the view andgive your opinion. (040320, 040619)
提示：这道题目当之无愧地成为母题，因为这道话题自从2010年9月起已经成为了雅思口语话题中的题目。11年8月20日，这道题目以变题的形式再一次出现在雅思写作中。 子题：是否应该严惩违反交规者?城市中采取预防犯罪的措施，利大于弊吗？个人如果为所欲为，社会就无法运转，你同意吗？犯罪是世界问题，无法预防，你同意吗？ 3. 罪犯惩处 母题：Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with https://www.doczj.com/doc/d110196219.html,cation and job training are better ways to help them. Do you agree ordisagree? (050618, 080918) 提示：其实囚禁imprisonment和再教育都是一种让囚犯改造rehabilitate 的方法。还有communityservice对于轻犯和初犯都是一种不错的惩处方式。 子题：监狱除了惩罚犯罪，还有什么功能?降低犯罪的最佳方法是延长监狱星期吗?刑满释放人员再犯罪率很高，为什么，如何解决?你认为罪犯应该送到监狱还是应该做一些社区工作或学习一些技能？
福州朗阁雅思培训https://www.doczj.com/doc/d110196219.html,/ 实例解析雅思写作话题分类解析之犯罪类（上） 朗阁海外考试研究中心曹美玲 犯罪类考题一直是考生闻声色变的一类考题，很多烤鸭总是觉得这类考题偏离了我们的日常生活，很难下笔，很难有想法。所以只能在考前进行各种祈祷，希望不要出现犯罪类的题目。很多考生甚至认为，一旦考试遇见此类题目，那就是必死无疑。犯罪类话题一直以来属于考查频率比较低的话题，实际上其难度却是非常巨大的。其主要原因有两方面：首先，从内容这个层面上来说，大部分学生并不熟悉和了解这个话题，所以相对于比较常考的话题诸如科技和教育来说，犯罪话题要难很多。当一个考生拿到一个题目的时候，可能很难总结出相关的思路和分论点。其次，犯罪话题的相关词汇对于大多数考生来说是非常陌生的。就算考生整理出了相关的词汇，他们也很难用英文准确地表达出来。 所以，对于考生来说，想要很好的搞定雅思写作中的犯罪话题，就必须从写作素材、话题词汇、语言角度精心准备，才能够一一攻克难题。其实任何话题的考题都是如此的。雅思写作过程中审题是非常重要但是常常被考生忽视的一个环节。我们在动笔写作之前最先要解决的一个问题就是搞清楚题目需要我们讨论的话题究竟是什么。如果只是了解个大概就开始动笔写，最终很容易因为偏题而无谓失分。朗阁福州雅思培训中心的专家通过长期的总结与研究，将从犯罪类的历年高频考题，详解其思路以及相关的表达，为考生解决这一大难题。 历年高频考题汇总 1. 量刑原则（C7 T2） Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others， however， argue that the circumstances of an individual crime， and the motivation for committing it， should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. 题目解析：本文是要讨论是否应该为每种犯罪行为制定固定惩罚，还是应该具体情况具体分析。构思时，考生应该从两方面进行分析和论证，然后在此基础上得出自己的倾向性。最简 单的写法是文章分为四段：第一段引出话题，第二段和第三段分别讨论两个方面的观点和各自的理由，第四段提出作者自己的观点。更加复杂一点的写法是把作者自己的观点结合进第二和第三段，也就是说，在讨论别人观点的时候就进行有倾向性的评价。 相关表达： have a deterring effect on 对…有威慑作用 be subject to 遭受 be convicted with sth 被判有某个罪行
雅思写作Task2范文：全球化使文化特征消失 由于通信和交通运输的飞速增长，整个社会迅速全球化。一些人担心这种全球化将导致文化特征的流失。你同意这种说法么？一起来看看这篇雅思范文是如何回答的吧！认真研读一定的雅思范文及作文模板可以帮助我们检验自己的写作水平，并能很好地吸收和应用优秀范文里的优秀内容。 Write about the following topic: As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to a phenomenon known as globalization. Some people fear that globalization will inevitably lead to the total loss of cultural identity. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Model Answer: Globalization means that in some ways people around the world are becoming more and more similar. We often eat the same food, watch the same TV programmes, listen to the same music and we wear the same clothes. Some of this at least can be blamed on the spread of multinational brands available all over the world. On the surface, it may appear as if the global diversity of cultural identities is being lost. If, the argument goes, people in Tokyo and London look and dress the same, then that must mean that cultural differences are disappearing. However, I would argue that this is a very narrow definition of culture and that in fact cultural differences are as present as ever.
雅思写作Task2范文：对电影中的暴力的讨论许多人认为电影中的暴力镜头对青少年产生影响，并进而加剧了社会暴力犯罪的发生。你怎么看？这篇文章是关于这个话题的观点类范文。认真研读一定的雅思范文及作文模板可以帮助我们检验自己的写作水平，并能很好地吸收和应用优秀范文里的优秀内容。 A lot of people believe that the amount of violence shown on TV and in the cinema affects the actions of our young people and therefore increases the amount of violence in our society today. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? What can be done to reduce violence in our society today? Model Answer: The question of whether the amount of violence on TV and cinema has affected young people in our society is something which cannot be quantified or proved. My opinion is though that the answer is “yes, it has”. TV and cinema today do show a large amount of violence and, although we try and shield our young people from seeing too much,
犯罪类话题 Crime_犯罪行为 crimes criminal acts misdeeds delinquency juvenile delinquency 青少年犯罪 犯罪+犯罪率 commit a crime the crime rate/incident犯罪率 rampant 猖獗的 the crime is rampant rampant violence 刑罚 lengthy jail terms put sb. into the prison/jail a penalty of 2 yea rs’ imprisonment lifelong imprisonment probation He's been released from prison on probation. 刑罚 sentence sb. to death death penalty capital punishment v. + 罪行 combat, fight, tackle, beat, curb 打击犯罪行为curb harmful emissions from factories impose curbs on smoking control, cut, reduce 控制、减少 detect, investigate 调查、侦查 青少年 kid child children youngster the youth adolescent (13~18) teenager (13~19) young people 青少年犯罪 juvenile delinquency青少年犯罪 juvenile delinquent 青少年罪犯 stringent punishment/penalty 严厉的惩罚 青少年犯罪的原因1
雅思大作文范文-全球化
雅思大作文范文-全球化
Some people believe that charities should give aid to those who need the aid most, wherever they live. Some people believe that charity organizations would better concentrate on people in their own countries instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Concern about humanitarian assistance has been heightened in recent years. Although it illustrates a moral ideal of mankind, many people who hold opposing views think that the welfare of fellow citizens is the priority. International aid has its weaknesses but its importance should not be denied. The main reason why international donation agencies should view international aid from a global perspective is that their funds can help the citizens of those recipient countries to combat poverty, disease and inequality. We should first recognize that citizens of developing countries are in desperate need of aid, because they are susceptible to natural or man-made disasters such as wars. In those war-torn or poverty-stricken countries, where resources are scanty, there is a high demand for food, medicine tents and shelters. In addition, humanitarian action can restore some of their basic rights, such as the right to receive education. This is also consistent with the universal principle of supporting vulnerable populations. Those who cannot provide financial support can work as international volunteers and deliver services, such as training and medical service, to those needy people. Despite the heightened importance of international aid, people have discovered
雅思写作大作文犯罪类话题思路指 导 犯罪类话题出现频率不高，但考生平时写作备考中依然要重视这类话题的训练。本期的写作思路指引就为大家分析，如何做好犯罪类话题的写作思路分析，下面就和大家分享雅思写作大作文话题思路指导，来欣赏一下吧。 雅思写作大作文话题思路指导：犯罪类 首先我们来看一下关于犯罪类写作话题有哪些，主要有分析犯罪的原因，青少年犯罪问题以及如何降低犯罪。话题题目如下：The news about violent crimes may frighten people or, on contrary, encourage them to commit a crime. Therefore, some believe that these types of news should not be reported in newspapers or on TV. To what extend do you agree or disagree? In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes. What are the causes? How should these young criminals be punished? In many countries crime is increasing. What are the main reasons for this? What can be done to improve the situation?
下面我们就一一分析一下。 首先：关于犯罪的成因。 无论是青少年犯罪或者成年人犯罪，首先应该想到的是经济问题，经济问题会影响社会的稳定，如失业率的提升，失学、食物匮乏、家庭负担加重甚至破产，这时就会滋生犯罪。而贫穷落后地区的儿童往往面临失学问题，也是造成青少年犯罪的重要原因。 由经济层面进入教育层面，大部分暴力犯罪者的受教育程度比较低，他们因为贫穷过早的进入社会，或者失业导致流落街头，这类人群冲动易怒，易发生冲突。 心理健康问题，这是比较容易忽略的问题。校园暴力者本身会存在心理问题，甚至场景是校园暴力，家庭暴力的受害者。 这里有一些特殊的犯罪比如网络诈骗、经济犯罪这些则是其他原因，要单独说。由于信息技术发达，个人信息安全遭到窃取，给网络诈骗可乘之机。还有就是一些机构腐败滋生。高科技犯罪者本身的受教育程度可能很高，智商也高，这时候我们要转换思路，这类高科技犯罪背后的原因是法律意识淡薄。 犯罪情节由轻到重包括：校园暴力、盗窃、杀人，经济犯罪、网络诈骗等。近年来青少年犯罪的相关新闻比较多见，建议考生多关注相关报道，新闻中会给出相关的事件分析。
雅思写作模板雅思写作高分词汇犯罪类青少年犯罪 今天我们雅思写作的相关文章来研究犯罪类话题，即如何使青少年远离犯罪。跟之前一样，小编会给出相应的题目，话题下的雅思写作高分词汇，以及大致的汉语思路。 题目 Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 雅思写作高分词汇-犯罪类 productive members of society 富有生产力的社会成员 discourage them from breaking the law 阻碍他们破坏法律 accept advice from someone who can speak from experience 接受从自身经验出发的人的建议 reformed offenders 改过自新的犯罪分子 dispel any ideas 驱散任何观念 leading glamorous lives 过着迷人的生活 adolescents are often indifferent to the guidance given by…未成年人经常对来自…的指导无动于衷 the vivid and perhaps shocking nature of these stories 这些故事鲜活或者令人震惊的本质 have a powerful impact 有强有力的影响 informing teens about what happens to lawbreakers 告知青少年犯罪分子会发生什么 reluctant to take advice from figures of authority 不愿意接受来自权威人物的意见 credible sources of information 信息的可靠来源
雅思写作中关于犯罪的高分词汇 下面是我搜集的关于犯罪的雅思写作高分词汇： 触犯法律 break/violate/flout/disobey the law 犯罪 commit a crime 罪行 offences(BrE)/crimes/criminal acts 罪犯 criminal/offender/culprit.perpetrator 从犯 accomplice/accessory(n)/convicts(n)后者指帮助犯罪但为直接参与的人受害者 victim(n) 心理创伤 trauma(n) 曾横社会 resent society/hold a grudge against society 囚犯 inmate/convicts(n) 牢房 cell 监禁(v) imprison/incarcerate(vts) someone 教育罪犯 educate/edify(vts) criminals 宽容的 lenient(adj) 改造罪犯 reform/rehabilitate criminals 执法部门 law enforcement agencies 重罪 heinous crimes/flagitious crime/felony(n) 轻罪 petty crime/misdemeanour(BrE) 初犯的人 first-time offender 惯犯 hardened criminals/repeat criminals 遏制猖獗的犯罪 curb/halt/check(vts) the rampant(adj) crimes 再次犯罪(v) revert(vi) to crime 再次犯罪(n) recidivism
Some people believe that charities should give aid to those who need the aid most, wherever they live. Some people believe that charity organizations would better concentrate on people in their own countries instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Concern about humanitarian assistance has been heightened in recent years. Although it illustrates a moral ideal of mankind, many people who hold opposing views think that the welfare of fellow citizens is the priority. International aid has its weaknesses but its importance should not be denied. The main reason why international donation agencies should view international aid from a global perspective is that their funds can help the citizens of those recipient countries to combat poverty, disease and inequality. We should first recognize that citizens of developing countries are in desperate need of aid, because they are susceptible to natural or man-made disasters such as wars. In those war-torn or poverty-stricken countries, where resources are scanty, there is a high demand for food, medicine tents and shelters. In addition, humanitarian action can restore some of their basic rights, such as the right to receive education. This is also consistent with the universal principle of supporting vulnerable populations. Those who cannot provide financial support can work as international volunteers and deliver services, such as training and medical service, to those needy people. Despite the heightened importance of international aid, people have discovered
下面是一篇关于媒体中的暴力的雅思大作文写作范文，在这篇雅思大作文范文中主要讨论了应该如何控制电视和电影中的暴力镜头的数量以减少少年暴力犯罪在社会上的发生。在何种程度你同意还是不同意这个观点呢?下面是环球雅思介绍的详细内容。 雅思大作文题目： The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease the violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this issue? You should write at least 250 words. You should use your own ideas of knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. 雅思大作文范文： Nowadays there is a large amount of violence in films and on television. I agree that the government should take some effective measures to control the amount of the violence in order to decrease the violent crimes in society.（段首明确观点） Although we cannot establish a simple, direct, cause-and-effect relationship between media violence and violence in our society, there has been extensive research indicating that those who as children are exposed to violent TV shows or films are much more likely to later be convicted of crime. Because as the main mass media, TV and films can be a powerful influence in developing value systems and shaping behavior, especially to the young people. A case in points that the study shows girls who watch more than an average amount of violence tend to throw things at their husbands, and boys who grow up watching violent TV shows are more likely to be violent with their wives.（举例证明观点） Another reason is that too much media violence makes people become "immune" to the horror of violence and gradually accept violence as a way to solve problems. They may think society justice cannot be realized in reasonable and fair ways. Violence worship becomes more and more popular among some young people, which will pose a potential danger to the security of society.（进一步阐述观点） The government should be aware that TV or film violence would not disappear even if the harms can be realized widely. Violence is being used as a superficial way to attract and hold audience. In order to decrease the violent crimes in society the government should establish strict laws to control or even prohibit the violence on TV and in films. （结尾点题，并呼应起初所提出的观点） 以上就是这篇雅思大作文写作范文之电视电影对于少年犯罪的影响的全部内容。这篇雅思大作文写作题目是非常经典的媒体和政府的结合，文章采用了总分总的传统写作形式，结构清晰，用词准确。雅思大作文范文中的句型和段落结构安排，以作为参考，并注意字数的控制。最后，环球雅思祝大家的雅思写作得高分！
雅思大作文范文：国际间合作 本文是雅思大作文范文：国际间合作，供大家阅读参考。认真研读一定的雅思范文及作文模板可以帮助我们检验自己的写作水平，并能很好地吸收和应用优秀范文里的优秀内容。 题目：Some people think the main benefit of international cooperationis in protection of the environment, while others think that the main benefit is in the world business. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 范文： There is no doubt that international cooperation, from private enterprisesto governments, has become increasingly prevalent (= more popular these years). It is on account of growingly global economy, and it is beneficial for almost every country in the world. 近年来，私企和政府间的国际化合作变得广泛而流行。这是由于经济全球化的趋势和世界各国的利益共同导致的。 People firmly believe that the international cooperation is good for environment protection. It is well awarethat every country has its unique way to protect environment. For example, the Dutch do well in disposing
犯罪类话题作文例文 犯罪类话题一直是雅思大作文高频题目。其中两道题目都与青年相关，即青少年犯罪，青少年犯罪与成年人犯罪惩罚程度的比较。 相似题目： Young people who commit crimesshould be treated in the same way as adults byauthorities.To what extent do you agree or disagree?(犯罪2015.04.25) In some countries,a high proportion of criminal acts as committed by teen agers.Why has thishappened?What can be done to deal with this?(犯罪2015.06.18) Many people do not feel safe at home or they are out.What are the causes an d what can bedone to make people feel safe?(犯罪2015.06.27) People are afraid to leave their homes for fear of crimes. Some people believe that moreaction should be taken to prevent crimes while others think that lit tle could be done. Discussboth sides and give your opinion.(犯罪2015.09.3) 高分范文题目： Children are committing more crimes. What are the causes of the phenomen on? How should they be punished? 写作提纲： Reasons： 1 economic pressure, parents busy with work 2 small family 3 pressure from parents and from school as well How to punish them： 1 deprive of freedom 2 work for local community 范文： Youth crime contributes significantly to the increasing crime rate in the moder n society.There is no doubt that these young delinquents take their punishme nt, but I prefer in differentways. The reasons for this phenomenon are worth of scrutiny. In China with the e
环境 1. The international community must act immediately to ensure that all countries reduce their consumption of fossil fuels, such as gas and oil. To what extent do you agree or disagree? It is argued that the International Community should put more efforts to encourage all countries in the world to decrease their fossil fuel’s utilization such as gas, oil, and coal. Personally, I strongly agree with this idea for many reasons. The most important thing we should mention is that fossil fuels’ consumption in all over the world is considered to be the main culprit of global warming and other environmental problems. First of all, it can be undeniable that burning oil and coal in domestic and industrial activities is producing tons of carbon dioxide and other detrimental chemical substances per year. Moreover, with the fast-developing pace of life and overpopulation, a significant number of transportations are being used, which is generating exhausted fumes and green-house gases in most of nations in the wo rld. That’s the reasons why a huge number of environmental issues are alarmingly emerging recently such as global warming, ice melting in all poses, sea level rising and the other severe weather conditions. Besides, it is clearly seen that the amount of fossil fuels in all over the world are restricted and nonrenewable. Each kind of fossil fuels energies needs millions of years to form, thus, with an enormous human beings’ demand, it will result in energy depletion in the near future. Furthermore, technologies producing alternative power resources have not reached the point in which people in all countries of the world can use renewable energies replacing fossil fuels. Not all of nations can have enough financial and technological resources to invest in alternative power resources, so that the use of these energies is extremely expensive. Ultimately, because of the energy shortages, industrial activities and global economic development will experience negative and pessimistic impacts. In conclusion, I will reaffirm that International Community should take actions urgently to decrease the consumption of fossil fuels and other harmful energy in all nations.
雅思写作大作文思路警察是否应该持枪 why police should or should not carry guns 今天我们雅思写作大作文思路的文章来研究下警察是否应该持枪的问题。在这方面，各个国家的情况不同。英国街头的巡警一般都不携带枪支，取而代之的是电击枪或者警棍这种非致命性武器。美国警察则普遍配枪。在一个枪支普及率超高的国家，如果自己不持枪的话，很容易在与犯罪分子的斗争中陷入劣势。中国警察则是平时不配枪，在执行任务的时候临时申请。任务结束后及时上交。不配枪有不配枪的好处。这样子不容易误伤，也容易活捉犯罪分子。但配枪也有配枪的好处，可以对犯罪分子产生足够的威慑，最短时间内结束他们的犯罪行为。小编搜集了一些相关的素材和思路，以供大家参考。 警察应该持枪 why police should carry guns Many criminals use weapons 许多犯罪分子使用武器。 The threat of a gun can deter criminals 枪支的威胁可以震慑犯罪分子。 Police officers can forces a criminal to surrender 警察可以迫使犯罪分子投降。 It is easier to arrest someone and avoid physical violence 更容易抓捕某人并避免肢体冲突。 The police may shoot violent criminals in self-defense 警察可能在自卫的情况下射杀暴力的犯罪分子。 They can protect the public 他们能够保护公众。 They can shoot an escaping criminal who poses a serious danger to the public 他们可以射击对公众造成威胁的逃跑的犯罪分子。 警察不应该持枪 why police should not carry guns There is a risk of accidents and mistakes